T2+Narritives

 //**If I had one chance**//

//**If I was going to sail around the circular bowl, the luxurious beaches in Hawaii and go for a relaxing swim and fell the angry waves crawl up my spine. Or Drink some mouth watering coconut milk and let it run down my throat. Maybe even America where I can eat a greasy, beautiful, scrunches hamburgers or go to the staggering Disney Land and go on the spectacular rides or see some Disney characters. Paris France next because I would love to taste there green, smelly snails or jump off the sky high Eiffel tower. But New Zealand would be my favourite because I can go see the legendary All Blacks and also stay home with My kind, awesome, loving family. That would be the places I would sail to if I just had one chance.**//

//**No Housework**//

//**Play PS3 all day till I’m glued to the couch and looking like a frozen statue, and smelling like a garbage truck.**//

//**North Pole**//

//**1.The closest land to the North pole is Greenland which is 725km away from the North Pole**// **//2.The North pole is located near the middle of Arctic ocean//** //**3.The north pole is the most northernmost point on the earth**// //**4.The sea depth at the North Pole has been measured at 4,261 m (13,980 ft).**// //**5.****If you're standing at the North Pole, all points are south of you**//


 * //Me as a student//**


 * //Thomas Jefferson is probably a much more smarter boy and maybe have a really brainy head. But I still do all things your meant to do at school like maths, reading, writing, sport and do some studying like a normal kid willΩ. Maybe I am better than him at sports and he’s better than me at work who knows. Even know he’s more determined than me I still think that I’m going well at school and determined to stay there.//**

**//By Kata Brill//**

//**North Pole**// //**1.The closest land to the North pole is Greenland which is 725km away from the North Pole**// //**2.The North pole is located near the middle of Arctic ocean**// //**3.The north pole is the most northernmost point on the earth**// //**4.The sea depth at the North Pole has been measured at 4,261 m (13,980 ft).**// // **5.****If you're standing at the North Pole, all points are south of you** // // **By Kata Brill** //

//**If I had one chance**//

//**Hawaii would be the first place I would sail to because of it’s great luxury beaches and the fantastic smell of fresh coconuts. Maybe even America where I can eat a greasy ,beautiful ,scrunches hamburgers or go to the staggering Disney Land and go on the spectacular rides or see some disney characters. Paris France next because I would love to taste there green, smelly snails or jump off the sky high Eiffel tower.But New Zealand would be my favourite because I can go see the legendary All Blacks and also stay home with My lovely ,kind ,awesome family. That would be the places I would sail to if I had one chance.**//  //**By Kata Brill**// 

Lost in the fog

Exhausted I couldn’t to much more then swim around looking for light or help. After about three hours in the frigid water I couldn’t fell a bone in my body. ‘Light” I screamed, swimming as fast as a fish I reached the boat it smelled like rotten fish.‘Hello Hello” A shadow leaned off the side of the boat his beaming eyes stared at me.’ Hi my name is Rick ”. ‘Please can you take me back to shore Iv’e been stranded in the ocean for at least 3-4 hours and Im extremely sore, hungry and tired and I want to get home”. I waited in silence for a couple of seconds. ‘Hop on” he said in his deep croaky voice.

Going 35 knots It felt like I was going to fall off the boat. Wind blowing past my face at the speed of light. ‘Slow down” I shouted He got faster and faster then he did a ignoramus turn and I hit the solid rock floor on my head. I got up and touched my head it felt like a chicken just laid and egg. ‘What was that’’ I shouted. It started to get darker and darker then it went pitch black. Drops of water dripping on my watermelon head. Something grabbed my arm and tight me up. A yellow torch turned on Arrrgggghhh it shined in my aqua blue eyes. ‘It’s burning my eyes” I yelled. ‘Shut up” he said. He picked me up and threw me into an old rusty cage.I hit the ground in shock the cage felt horrible it was uncomfortable, lumpy and extremely dirty. ‘What are you doing”. ‘I’m locking you up”.Why because I get lonely here and I want a friend so you are going to stay here with me for the rest of your life. ‘Rest of my life thats a long time’ I mumbled. He turned his back and walked away. Crash something dropped from his pocket he didn’t even realize it I looked closer with my beady eyes. ‘A phone”.

  

 __Monday 27th June__

__Topic:__
 * 1) A boy called Rick went on a boat trip at 5:00 pm at night
 * 2) Rick goes on a biscuit he was going 35 knots.
 * 3) Rick wanted to go faster and the sky started to get gloomy
 * 4) Boom Rick hit a giant wave and hit the water face first and all he could see was fog
 * 5) He was shouting for help his dad could here him but didn’t know were he was
 * 6) He was shivering like and ice berg and his legs started to get tired
 * 7) He could see a bright light shinning in the fog
 * 8) He swam do it and it was boat it didn’t look like his dad’s boat
 * 9) It was another person’s boat his name was bob. Rick thinks he’s good but Bob Takes him to an underwater cave
 * 10) Bob locks him up but he drops his phone
 * 11) Rick gets the phone and calls the police and his dad.
 * 12) Bob gets arrested and goes to jail and Rick get’s home safely

Setting : At sea in a town called Keri Keri but the live in Tauranga. School holidays

Characters: What are they like? How tall? Hobbies? Personalities? Sound like? deep husky voice? squeaky? Rick (main character) Rick is 13 years old and has long thick brown hair.Rick's favourite hobbies are rugby and fishing John Dad of Rick son he’s 42 and works works for a fishing shop in tauranga and is about 2m. Bob is a character that shows up in the end and has light brown hair and has a really croaky voice. Kim who is Rick mum she is a really good cook and has thick black hair and loves cooking and shopping.

Orientation: They go on a boat trip at 5pm at night and it’s a bit gloomy???? Rick is sent out to sea on a biscuit. (what sent out floating on his own? Why?)

Problem: Rick goes on a biscuit and hits a huge bump and falls into the ice cold water all he can see is fog and can’t see any sings of light or anyone. He’s sees a light and swim towards it and a guy called Bob owns the boat I ask him for a ride back to shore but he takes to a underwater cave and gets trapped

Resolution: Finds a phone and rings dad and dad calls the police Bob gets arrested and rick gets back to his batch safely. (How is he going to get back?)

Lost in the fog

‘Vroom’ it roared it’s engine and we were of on our great boat adventure.My long brown hair was flying with the wind. ‘I thought it was kind of weird to go at 5pm at night” extend this sentence. When we stopped it started to get a bit gloomy. ‘I hopped do you really just “hop on” be more descriptive on the biscuit ready for a bumpy ride. Splash! with a big heave my dad pushed me in the water. It looked like the water was growling at me. 3,2,1 Go! the boat pulled me with all it’s strength and I was off as fast as a cheetah. Fog started to cover the air I could hardly see my dad’s old rusty boat. I started to go up and down and my butt was turning red like a rose. BOOM my biscuit flipped I fell in the ice cold water. ‘ Help I shouted. I was shivering in the water all by myself.

‘Help” ‘Help” I shouted with all my breath. I swam around looking for someone but the fog was everywhere. I knew that going on a boat trip at 5pm at night was a dumb idea. He's probably looking for me but he probably can't see anything just fog. After thirty minutes my legs started aching and I was sore and tired. My mum and dad would be scared and frightened that I was lost somewhere in the sea mum would probably have a heart attack. I started to get so hungry and my tummy started talking to me saying ‘feed me feed me”. Freezing cold I could hardly move a bone. Thinking of standing in front hot fire and drinking my boiling hot chocolate, and I was in freezing water hungry, sore and lonely. __So your parents just left you in the water?? would this really happen? Try to come up with a realistic explanation as to why your parents couldn’t find you or didn’t come and find you__

Exhausted I couldn’t to much more then swim around looking for light or help. After about three hours in the frigid water I couldn’t fell a bone in my body. ‘Light” I screamed swimming as fast as a fish I reached the boat would you really be able to swim this fast after being in the water for three hours?. ‘Hello Hello” A shadow leaned off the side of the boat beaming his eyes at me.’ Hi my name is Rick ”. ‘Please can you take me back to shore Iv’e been stranded in the ocean fro at least 3-4 hours and Im extremely sore, hungry and tired and I want to get home”. ‘Hop on”.

Going 45 knots It felt that I was going to fall of the boat. Wind bowing past my face at the speed of light. Slow down I shouted He got faster and faster then he did a ignoramus turn and I hit the solid rock floor on my head. I got up and touched my head it felt like a chicken just laid and egg. ‘What was that’’ I shouted. It started to get darker and darker then it went pitch black. Something grabbed my arm and I was tight up. A light turned on Arrrgggghhh it shined right in my face. ‘It’s burning my eyes” Can you come up with a better description? I yelled. Shut up he said. He picked up and threw me into an old rusty cage. ‘What are you doing”. ‘I’m locking you up”.Why because I get lonely here and I want a friend so you are going to stay here with me for the rest of your life. He turned his back and walked away. She something dropped from his pocket he didn’t even realize it I looked closer with my beady eyes. ‘A phone”.

I sat down on the dirty floor thinking how to get the phone. I turned my head to find a whole pile of sticks lying in the corner. I grabbed the longest one that I could find. I put the stick threw the dusty gate and

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**I will achieve this by: Using language resources. Reading over my story and focusing on putting in fullstops, capital letters, commas and speech marks in the correct places**

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Topic: Identifying Similes Directions: Complete the simile by filling in the blank. 1. The car was as dirty as a dump. 2. The candy was like heaven__.__ __3. His hands were as big as an gorillas__ __.__ __4. My little brother sounds like a air horn__ __.__ __5. My room is as messy as__ cabbage truck__.__ __6. School is like Hell__. 7. The chair was as hard as a rock __.__ __8. Her hair looked like candy__. 9. The monster’s breath was like rotten bananas. 10. The water was as cold as ice. 11. My lunch tasted like lollies. 12. The rabbit was as soft as _cushion_.

Metaphors Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could say that Dan is a giant.

Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is:

tall He was taller than a giraffe kind He was fast He was faster than usian bolt slow He was slower than a turtle smart He was smarter than Elbert Einstein fat He was fatter than an elephant sneaky He was more sneaker than a spy angry He was angrier than a tiger beautiful she was more beautiful then sleeping beauty ugly She was more uglier than ugly betty. stubborn He was more stubborn then a zombie short He was shorter than a dwarf thin She was thiner then a piece of paper silly He was more silly than the guy of man vs wild scared easily He is a giant. She is an angle

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